We are editors

Today we were learning to edit our mahi about the taniwha at the marae. 

Anna had a comment on her writing about being more descriptive, show not tell. She will change what the Kapa Haka sounded like.

Cassia had a comment telling her to add more about what the taniwha looks like. She said he was blue and green, like most taniwhas, and it has red devil ears.

Hassan's comment was about what the taniwha ate. He added that his taniwha was a carnivore and ate meat.

Hodan's comment was to add more that the taniwha did at the marae. She added something he did to the people of HES.

Isla's comment said to say what the taniwha ate. He ate roast duck, cocopops, ricies and  sushi! She also added what the taniwha saw. He saw huge trees.